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346 INFORMATIVE SPEECHES FOR ANALYSIS AND DISCUSSION
MEDICAL ROBOTS: NEEDS IMPROVEMENT VERSION 347
348 INFORMATIVE SPEECHES FOR ANALYSIS AND DISCUSSION
Medical Robots: From Science Fiction to Science Fact
Needs Improvement Version
Commentary
The needs improvement and final versions of “Medical Robots” can help students see the difference be-
tween an ordinary informative speech and a superior one. Start by showing the needs improvement ver-
sion, followed by a class discussion having students assess the speaker’s development of ideas, delivery,
and visual aids. Then show the final version and have students assess the same aspects. Conclude by
discussing why the final version is superior to the needs improvement version. Video of both versions is
available online and on the DVD of student speeches that accompanies this edition of The Art of Public
Speaking. Below is an analysis of the needs improvement version.
Introduction: The introduction, which consists of paragraphs 1–3, demonstrates that the speaker has not
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