The excerpt below is the beginning of the results section of a recommendation report
about exercise equipment for a new fitness center. What is wrong with the excerpt?
Results
In this section, we describe our research into the best exercise equipment for your new
fitness center. We consulted Consumer Reports and Health Fitness and interviewed Dr.
Hilda Candlish, exercise physiologist, to evaluate the type and quality of equipment that
best meets your needs.
Treadmills
Treadmills are essential equipment for your fitness center, especially with the limited
number of outdoor running trails available in your neighborhood. Johnsung Cardio
Trainer, TreadTrainer SJ928, and the Pacer Elite 1100 are the most popular models
(“Treadmills,” Consumer, p. 102). Studies have shown these models to be the most
effective for cardio health (Candlish). We also researched the ProTread 44 and Precision
Treader models 24 and 28. We found that the SJ928 had the best overall performance
ratings (“Treadmills,” Consumer, p. 103) and is priced very competitively locally
(Sportshoppe, GymTastic). We conclude that your center should purchase a dozen of
these treadmills for zone C of our floor diagram, shown below.
Stationary Bicycles
Both types of stationary bicycles, recumbent and upright, should be available at every
fitness center (Candlish). Though the TrueFitness 356 has the best fitness rating
(Health), it has received low ratings for durability and reliability (“Latest,” Consumer),
and . . .
Jan is a technical writer for Endco, Inc., a company that has just completed a study to
determine whether to convert to a more advanced type of server software. Jan is now
compiling information for a report that will document the study and will be presented to
Endco’s CEO, budget director, and operations manager. Jan made a table showing the
pros and cons of each of the three brands of software under consideration, along with
costs. Endco’s Computer Services director also gave Jan his conclusions about each
brand and suggestions for what the company ought to do next. Which of the following
statements is correct?