The writer’s revision of the original paragraph below demonstrates which one of the
following?
Original: During our monthly meeting last month, we all came to the conclusion
that overtime procedures are inadequate and that new procedures need to be
initiated. I discussed this problem with our chief accountant, who was sympathetic
and agreed to consider any changes we would like to make to the present
procedures. Please bring your suggested changes to this month’s departmental
meeting scheduled for 2:30 P.M. next Wednesday afternoon.
Revision: During last month’s meeting, we concluded that our overtime procedures
need revision. Our chief accountant has agreed to consider any changes we would
like to make to the present procedures. Please bring your suggested changes to this
month’s departmental meeting scheduled for 2:30 P.M. next Wednesday.
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