Briana Alston
Writing Improvement Exercises 6.1-6.5 & 6.7-6.10
Activity 6.1
1) Despite the fact that we lost the contract, we must at this point in time move forward.
a. Although we lost the contract, we must now move forward.
2) In the event that interest rates increase, we will begin investing in the very near future.
a. If interest rates increase, we will begin investing soon.
3) We cannot fill the order until such time as payment is received for previous shipments.
a. We cannot fill the order until the payment is received for previous shipments.
4) As a general rule, we would not accept the return; however, we will in all probability
make an exception in this case.
a. Generally, we would not accept the return; however, we will probably make an
exception in this case.
5) In very few cases will investors buy stocks that fail to pay dividends or increase in value.
a. Seldom will investors buy stocks that fail to pay dividends or increase in value.
Activity 6.2
1) This message is to let you know that I received your e-mail and its attachments.
a. I received your e-mail.
2) This memo is to notify everyone that we will observe Monday as a holiday.
a. Monday is a holiday.
3) I am writing this letter to inform you that your homeowner’s coverage expires soon.
a. Your homeowner’s coverage expires soon.
4) This is to warn everyone that the loss of laptops endangers company security.
a. The loss of laptops endangers company security.
5) In the majority of instances, most of the shipping errors can be attributed to mistakes in
the preparation of the address label.
a. Most shipping errors are because of the mistakes in address labels.
Activity 6.3
1) There are many businesses that are implementing strict e-mail policies for employees.
a. Many businesses are implementing strict e-mail policies for employees.
2) It is the CEO who must approve the plan.
a. The CEO must approve the plan.
3) There are several Web pages you must update.
a. You must update several Web pages.
4) The manager says that there are many employees who did not return the health surveys.
a. Many employees did not return the health surveys.
5) It is my personal opinion that there are too many people dying while taking dangerous
selfies.
a. Too many people dying while taking dangerous selfies.
Activity 6.4
1) Because the proposals are exactly identical, we need not check each and every item.
a. Because the proposals are identical, we need not check every item.
2) Some of the funniest animated gifs on Twitter, Tumblr, and Reddit combine together
clips from movies or TV to produce comedic masterpieces.
a. Some of the funniest animated gifs on Twitter, Tumblr, and Reddit are combined
clips from movies or TV to produce comedic masterpieces.
3) It was the consensus of opinion that all office walls be painted beige in color.
a. It was the consensus of all that the office walls be painted beige in color.
