The State of Florida have high number of car accidents and as result people get injured, so is important
to know what to do in front of this situation. Even if you are a good driver it doesn’t mean that you will
be except from a car accident because even if you are respecting the traffic laws maybe somebody else
it isn’t. I remember a few month ago, I was driving late, and the street was empty, and I saw to lights
approaching to my car at high speed. I was very nervous, and I didn’t know what to do to avoid the
crash, but I was hopping that the driver from the other car realized what he was doing and lower the
speed and switched to a different line. Unfortunately, he didn’t do it and he hit my car so bad and the
Commented [KA1]: hThis word refers to the singular
noun “State of Florida”, and so should be “has” .
Commented [KA2]: The first sentence of this paragraph
says that the paragraph will be about what to do to prepare
for an automobile accident. However, the rest of this
paragraph is about a personal experience you had in an
accident. The content of this paragraph doesn’t really follow
the opening sentence. Make sure that your opening
sentence describes what the paragraph will tell your reader!
Commented [KA3]: Is this the word that you meant here?
Do you perhaps mean “exempt”?
Commented [KA4]: This word appears to be extraneous
here. Consider removing it.
(first) sentence.
